veined moon
behind a bare oak’s
silhouette
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A contest entry
- 'ku 'ku cachoo --enter your haiku here :) by sailor ptolema.
1050 points, ended August 4, 2008, 78 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oh right, I forgot the clappies that look like they're flagging down a jet
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This is beautiful - L1 captures what I have seen many times but never was able to verbalize. I like how it reads like a state, or phase of the moon.
Congratulations on the silver.
marlene
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Now, this is awesome. I love the idea of the moon looking veined behind leafless branches
. What a neat view. I can picture it clearly, but wish I could see it with my own eyes . I agree with Myron, it's beautiful.
thanks for entering and g'luck
-sailor ptolema
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Beautiful
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beautiful
This is a beautiful, austere haiku showing the way a moon can be viewed from a particular angle. The images are vivid and clean.
Good luck in the contest,
myron.
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