casino -
a woman on the balcony
ready to smoke
A contest entry
- 'ku 'ku cachoo --enter your haiku here :) by sailor ptolema.
1050 points, ended August 4, 2008, 78 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the double meaning, like she's getting ready to be "smokin' hot" at the tables. I imagine a very lonely, depressed woman who has money and doesn't want to lose it. Congratulations on the gold.
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oh right, I forgot the clappies that look like they're flagging down a jet
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yay - on the gold!
marlene
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I love this. It brings up a clear picture, whose meaning can be interpreted so many ways. For me, I keep thinking of a trophy wife, all dressed up, bored and alone, because her man is downstairs with the boys playing poker
. I love the story that can be created behind this .
Thanks for entering and g'luck.
-sailor ptolema -
I like this, it captures the tension of casinos very well -> places that I avoid, but I assume they're still the same... all about the random and next-to impossible chance of making it big. (I'd rather pull weeds than spend time/money in these places)
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Lovely haiky, Myron!
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What a perfect Haiku
I totally loved the image your words conjured up. Cheers and best of luck with this!
Anansey -
Disgusting
I love it. Hope I didn't alarm you with "Disgusting".
I meant the smoking thing...
But the haiku itself has your usual simplicity and screams awesome perfection. There's nothing challenging about it, and that's what I love. It's not patronizingly simple...it's perfectly simple.
Exactly what a haiku should be (not that I'd know)
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Now this one is quite solid.
I like the imagery involving the smoke,
it makes for a crisp ending. So, I don't
think I can offer much here, besides
saying I enjoyed this.
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ENjoying her night or lost so much she is angry stressed .good write
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Ooh! Now this is just plain good.
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