I saw silver stars
free-fall from midnight's mourning
where you streamed summer
A contest entry
- 'ku 'ku cachoo --enter your haiku here :) by sailor ptolema.
1050 points, ended August 4, 2008, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like the idea of watching shooting stars....how very quieting
Thanks for entering and g'luck
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Pretty
I liked the image you portrayed here. Where you streamed summer is a beautiful line. Nicely written.
~mandie~
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well done my dear with such beauty reflecting the wonders of auroras on a clear summers eve. much love and many blessings xxx
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Pretty pretty
As in, very pretty.
Your alliteration makes me grin...'silver stars', 'midnight's mourning' (particularly LOVE that) & 'streamed summer'
This is...awesome. Wish it was an ornament.
Good luck
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hehehe..im still raving mad..god i love the using the wod raving with mad because they go oh so well together when describing myself
but i feel good enough to give you the clappies you deserve lol. *hugs*
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This seems to be a very poetic and quite enigmatic little poem, utilizing the 17 syllable format.
I'm not at all sure what the third line is showing me. It confuses me. (But that could just be my faulty free-falling brain...lol).
best wishes in the contest,
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Thank you for your comment and time.
The third line to me was suppose to represent a loved one's tears as the rain that often ushers in the beginning of summer. Hope that makes sense and if it doesn't it is my fault as the writer that you didn't understand and not your's as the reader. -
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Should be 'yours'. Couldn't resist Billy! Just kidding. You know I'll always be Silly. God!!
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sigh... C
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hmmmmm im not going to say anything...
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