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Yearning Your Yes

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The sky always wept
while flowers withered
and ebony enveloped eve;

Hearts submerged sorrow
painting puce pulses
with wistful whispers
of how you remembered our
                                "fate"

by the stars which you swore
the never ending masquerade
would in fact never end.

Because in the tongues of truth
that slivered skin slowly
my veins vowed venial
for loving you.

Now we watch the oceans crash
        ~together~
as you pour my soul,
letting me drift away

 

          dead.

Author notes

Prompt:"Crimson tides bleed " by Julie
pic credit:Blood by ~yilujayss

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 8, 2008
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    Oh my goodness

    This piece truly gave me chills its so graphic in the pic of pain indeed


  • RainbowSky
    August 6, 2008

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    I'm going to go out on a limb, that's amazingly steardy and say you're going to famous. You had to have been born to write. You're sooooo good


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    Wow ! A fantastic dark write you have penned
    Words are wonderful and descriptive.
    Love the chosen image
    Powerful indeed
    Thank you for your entry and best wishes
    Julie

  • wendymolly
    July 31, 2008
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    Love the darkness you incorporated into this!*LOVE*
    PERFECT FOR THE PIC.


  • The Unknown Poet1
    July 29, 2008

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    wow is right! that is deep and dark! The use of alteratiioon while still maintaining the imagery and meaning is just short of brilliant. well honey 's love you
    Dad


  • maralisa silver member
    July 28, 2008

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    wow a very deep and powerful take on the promt with some very strong emotionsBecause in the tongues of truth that slivered skin slowly my veins vowed venial for loving you.Now we watch the oceans crash together as you pour my soul,letting me drift away dead.good luck in the contest


  • Killian Nightwind
    July 28, 2008
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    Wow...thats just....wow indescribable...


  • Lady Australis silver member
    July 28, 2008
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    oh wow!!!!!
    SISYY.. u ok?
    i love you


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 28, 2008

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    Indescribable

    This was just brilliant! Wow, I'm just speechless. You chose the terminology well and it really siuted the concept of the piece. It was so deep in meaning and the expression is exceptional. Beautiful work, I love how it ended morbidly, and simple yet capturing. Brilliant work, keep it up!

    ~Emily~ xx


  • echo-ink
    July 28, 2008
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    WOW! you certainly do have a way with words, steph, you were born to write, this was amazing, as all of your work is, yessa.

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