lips are burning
on the pavement lines
that lead me down
your throat.
i have closed
my eyes
to feel you
make me.
and these fingers slip to
seduce,
and they are up and down
my stomach,
chest,
and thighs
until i'm aching
evolution, fire collecting
in the space where
no one sleeps
but me.
and sinful screams
in silence, tongue
slipping between thighs
and
i am the one
who is shaking - the space
where i am unlocked
by hard heat.
breathing
out, counting the seconds
and i'm trying not to
scream on rooftops.
no hands between us,
we take one breath
to moan
and you
fill me
with everything.
Author notes
Mmmm...
I purposely kindof left it ambiguous as to gender... but in my mind it was straight.
It varies by person.
FICTIONAL.
A contest entry
- sex by Tangled Angle.
450 points, ended August 1, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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this is beautiful. the opening image is great. the rest of it was smooth and sexy, but there wasn't anything that totally stood out until i got to this part:
"breathing
out, counting the seconds
and i'm trying not to
scream on rooftops.
no hands between us,
we take one breath
to moan"
- the rooftop concept was clever.
you wrote this very well. awesome job.
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awesome. i like the big FICTIONAL tag, hahaha. but yeah, this was pretty sexy. i dig
-cassidy
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I loved everything, all the images, the taking turns. The unity in the ending. All well done, the only thing I disliked was this line "and it is up and down." What is "it,"????
Other than that very talented writing, oh and a great title too.
Good luck in Tyler's contest,
Shirley -
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"it" should be "they".
Thanks for pointing that out.
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Oh no problem. Just caught my eye is all. Again, lovely writing.
S
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fictional, eh?
i'm just kidding. this was sexy, darling, very delicious, and that's a fantastic opening image.
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yes, fictional.
thanks.
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REALLY WELL DONE LOVE THE METAPHOR GOING ON IN THIS PIECE, BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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