lost in thought
evening breezes stir
a memory
Author notes
What I am feeling now.
modern haiku, not the traditional 5/7/5
I've been trying to write haiku since February, and I'm struggling through haikumonk's class.
He probably can't wait to get his hands on this one.
A contest entry
- Teach me how to write a haiku by notorious.
2246 points, ended August 10, 2008, 44 entries
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Bemusing. The final line gives a widening of focus to me, and I drift along with a memory - very nice!
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Nice!!!
Lost in thought
evening breezes stir
a memory-
I love this in it's artistic simplicity. It creates a great image. Good haiku.
~mandie~
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BTW, I prefer modern haiku
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Well, I'm in myron's class & I failed the first lesson 4x.
I love this..."a memory" is a fantastic way to end those first two lines. How...wonderfully climactic.
There's not much more I can say except I love it
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Yep, that sounds familiar...
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