I know I have done some horrific things
To those I love the most.
But I’ve tried with all I have
To make that person a ghost.
She was selfish and hurtful and stubborn
When inside she only wanted to be
Loving and giving and considerate
And become a brand new me.
One that could be the Queen of their Hearts
That was what she dreamt of each night
And if God has his way I will make this happen
And I’ll make all those things turn out right.
Author notes
'Banana splits'
A contest entry
- Lost Yourself, Find Yourself by dreamersalwayslive.
735 points, ended July 30, 2008, 20 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Well penned(:
The rhyme was really subtle & the tiny emotional aspect was wonderful. Thank you so much for sharing. -
Think we've all been in that situation - unintentionally or intenionally hurting those we shouldn't.Nicely written, the rhyme doesn't seem to strain, I liked the way you are so definite in the intention of change. Congratualations on the gold, well deserved, thanks for sharing.
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Beautiful write my dear friend. I have had this feeling a lot in my life but hold fast to God. For he will always be there. Great rhyming scheme. Very well penned.
Warmest,
Mylee -
Very nice
I love this poem! The words really speak to me, and I adore the take on the prompt given to you. The ryhme is great in my opionion! It's a wonderful poem and thanks for entering my contest!
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Nice poem. Fundemental changes are the hardest ones to make. My own changes have taken years of hard work.
I enjoyed this alot.
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