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Ebony Delight

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Graceful flow sumptuous curves,

satin skin aglow in dim light.

Nearly concealed in lavender lace,

back poised of wanton desires

of passions yet.

Lulled by sweet indulgence

in ebony delight.

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  • daviscth silver member
    August 4, 2008
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    Kudos to you!! You did a great job with the imagery in this piece. Congratulations on your HM.


    • Rclane gold member
      August 4, 2008
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      Thank you so much for stopping to read and your kind words.


  • penman gold member
    July 30, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. a great creation for the prompt. Congratulations on the honorable mention.

    • Rclane gold member
      July 30, 2008
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      Thank you for your time in reading and commenting.


  • Kazytc
    July 28, 2008

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    Sensational!

    Sensational! This is such a tribue to the dark skinned and tanned, everywhere! Lovely vibrant sensual and graphic descriptives which weaved into the mind of the reader to totally enchant and delight. Lovely work, bravo, love it! Well done!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


    • Rclane gold member
      July 28, 2008
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      Thank you so much for stopping to read and comment. I'm so glad these words found their way into your enjoyment.


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    My goodness Rick.. a very nice, sensual write. Very well done my friend, I wish you all the luck!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Has a soft sensuality to it as also a kind of drawing you into its indulgence! Nicely done!

    • Rclane gold member
      July 28, 2008
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      Thank you for reading and commenting also for making me think and the HM


  • notorious gold member
    July 27, 2008

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    Very colorful

    & actually not very dirty at all.

    I think you could've done separate stanzas since you used periods at the end...but it's not necessary.

    Excellent flow & my favorite line would have to be "dim light"<--makes me think of restaurants catering to couples


    • Rclane gold member
      July 27, 2008

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      Thank you for reading and commenting. I'm still learning on periods and stanzas and do appreciate the input so I can improve.


  • Angelflower
    July 27, 2008

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    Oh.. this is really nice.. I like the soft imagery here.. you did a really wonderful job with this prompt.. best of luck.

    Angel

    • Rclane gold member
      July 27, 2008
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      Thank you for your time in reading and your kind comment. I'm glad you enjoyed.

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