there is
something different in this
slide of skin, this
golden touch where our lips graze. we
slip like colts, laughing & young
again. your fingers tracing me, painting me
in bursting suns & the dapples
of afternoon, tracing shadows & valleys
in the quiver of my pulse, in
that seamless join of you on me in –
and
we are breathless, gasped
& unison-ed,
atoned, lifted & joined &
weightless -
-
(until trembling, we tumble
together)
Author notes
intended as gay, Tyler, but I guess 'explicit' doesn't come naturally in poetry (to me), so could be read as is wished by the audience. (I imagine you can guess who; I may try again in the morning)
A contest entry
- sex by Tangled Angle.
450 points, ended August 1, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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*sigh* this was beautiful.
"your fingers tracing me, painting me
in bursting suns & the dapples
of afternoon, tracing shadows & valleys
in the quiver of my pulse, in
that seamless join of you on me"
genius. just amazing. i love it!
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By the AP "Line Numbers" feature, lines thirteen through sixteen, were my favorites. The wording was simple, unified. I love the completeness of the poem, and the fact that it lacks vulgarity. Well done, and good luck in Tyler's contest.
Shirley -
This is really lovely. The format is so unique and I love how it contributes to the airy, lightweight feel of the poem. I really related to it and it brought out great imagery.
Especially like this part:
your fingers tracing me, painting me
in bursting suns & the dapples
of afternoon, tracing shadows & valleys
in the quiver of my pulse
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"we
slip like colts, laughing & young
again. your fingers tracing me, painting me
in bursting suns & the dapples
of afternoon, tracing shadows & valleys
in the quiver of my pulse"
I absolutely adore this.
it's simply perfect.
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FANTASTIC!!!!! I LOVE THIS, I WOULD GIVE THIS THE GOLD
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