bougainvillea vine
stalls a japanese beetle
what’s not to admire?
Author notes
One of those iridescent beetles just buzzed past me, but did a slow-down by the bougainvillea - it made me admire the thing too, well the both of them.
This is a "panwulf" form of haiku - similar in form to traditional haiku only the last line ends in a question.
Panwulf is an invented form created by Pania and Cynewulf.
A contest entry
- Teach me how to write a haiku by notorious.
2246 points, ended August 10, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this - especially as it was a moment you actually captured - it works the better for it - well done
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Great 'ku. You gave me the picture beautifully; it's nice to see a new form used!!!
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I like
It is cute and has great imagery, plus I learned something new...panwulf...never knew. Thanks for sharing your work and the lesson.
~mandie~
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Love this!!!
You've squeezed an INCREDIBLE amount of realistic (considering how you just saw it) imagery and...wow.
The remix of the haiku I don't mind at all because you've done it so well...
Thanks for entering, this was brilliant
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Oh my, love it. I can see this, and the beetle slamming on its brakes to look at the lovely vine
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no critique. You've written a wonderful 'ku
-sailor ptolema
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