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Window Pane

I jump out of bed happy and excited

Pull up my window, pleased and delighted

Watching the breeze move

And hearing the birds sing

Waving at new neighbors

And doing other things

Like smelling the sweet nature

Coming inside of me

And listening to a buzz

Of a silly old bee

There's lots of things to see

On the other side of the window

Like watching butterflies play

And stare at the hollow meadow

But now it's time to go

And get ready for today

I'll save and cherish

The other side of my window pane

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  • Judith Chandler
    July 29, 2008
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    "The other side of my window pane" What a great line, very evocative.

    Nice write, so upbeat.


  • Redeemed15
    July 28, 2008

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    To me, the lines are kinda broken off and it disrupts the flow and beauty of the poem. but, who am i to critique, i do the same thing.


  • ea silver member
    July 28, 2008

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    a happy morning song this is! Thank you for this refreshing view from your bedroom window and a great start to any day.


  • gothicchildren05
    July 27, 2008
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    this is really cute. I love the imagery and the wording. it's a cute little piece and I can picture it all. I remember just recently looking out my window in the morning and seeing a little finch come by. Nature is wonderful and delightful. nice piece.