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I found Me When I found You

Who am I?
I used to think
Why do I cry for everything?
Why do they pick on me because I dress in black?
How comes I'm the only one who gets attacked?
Nobody really liked me
I didn't understand
Did I do something wrong?
Should I stop dressing with these brands?
I was lost
I didn;t know what to do
I was all alone until I found you
You made me smile
You made me laugh
You gently glued da pieces back to a working heart
I liked you
You liked me
You were the only one who really got me
Now I'm happy
I don't care what anybody says
Cause I have you
You listen
You hear
You correct me
You've made me find myself
Everything is allrite
Everything is all good
I found myself
When I found you

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  • darlintlc silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    There's a whole new world when we find the one who makes us feel good about ourselves!

    "I was lost
    I didn't know what to do
    I was all alone until I found you"

    Thanks for entering
    darlintlc


  • Kiss the girl--x
    August 8, 2008

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    I love the simplicity of the message in this, it's one that so many people can relate to, the only thing I would say, is the 'da' I think it kinda takes away from it a little bit.

    Thanks for entering
    ♥


  • JustsimplyKatiee.
    August 3, 2008
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    Good luck babe.


  • teenage-screwup247
    July 29, 2008

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    amazing

    thats real good writing dude :]
    I feel what your goin thru, i just havnt found that person yet who i can trust you know?
    congrats you have tho i hope that works out

    kick ass job =]


  • dreamersalwayslive
    July 28, 2008

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    Nice

    I like the issue that is found here. The only two pieces of advice I have: Are 'comes' instead of 'come' and 'da' instead of 'the' there because you want them spelled like that? And the punctuation could use some work. But this is still a great poem that I agree with, because a great number of people can definately relate to this.


  • x.DeadRomancexx
    July 28, 2008

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    wow thats amazing and too me it makes alot of sense b.c im kinda the same way "kinda" alot of ppl dont like me much ither but thats there problem not mine just be who u r and keep writing i like to read more of ur poems ur pretty good. && if ppl arnt excepting u fer who they r just remember ur better then them so it doesnt matter. good luck!

    x


  • Lexie
    July 27, 2008

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    hey, thoughty i would read soem of your poems, really like this one, and i bet many people can relate to it.

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