She wasn't the one in the bridal gown
nor the one wearing His golden promise.
She was the only feeling sad and down
yet determined to stop the official kiss.
Her passion for Him still grew strong
all She wanted was Him to be aware
To set Her words right from wrong
and find out if He still did care.
He left Her for another girl's heart
unknowing He also left her heartbroken
Leaving Her picking up the remaining parts
and on this Day, her peace will be spoken.
To mend Her internal wounds she found
that only His love would set Her free
Letting Her true emotions resound:
she'd give it all up for Him eternally.
With a passion running so deep
she will not bite her lip, but speak:
"I love you darling forever and always
even if it's not me you're wishing stays."
Author notes
Dark, I love you too sweetie <3
Written January 9th, 2004
A contest entry
- DARK vows; speak now or forever hold your peace by theDARK1.
307 points, ended January 12, 2004, 4 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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reading this again brings my eyes floating in an ocean. the passion inside is erupting like a volcano. you still move me. this is 4 of 100 poems that has been applauded and will be placed in the body of the contest of "a DARK reading" as a live link for you being the grand prize winner. thank you for entering a brilliant write in the contest, luvya, DARK!
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Wow! This is so beautiful and sad! The last stanza
is my favorite because its just so deep! This poem
is so full of emotion! I had to read it a couple of
times though because I'm so use to poems that ~flow- lol..
but when I caught the rhythm it rocked!!! Very groovy
poem. Best luck on the contest!!!!!
/f /f
Sara -
I am not sure if I have told you this in a previous comment, but this background is beautiful!
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I have not been on in awhile and wanted to congratulate you on your trophy. It was well deserved and I felt that you would win one for your writing is fantastic! I guess I need to come on more often since I am guessing that the system thought I was gone. All of my Instant Messages are gone from everyone to include the nice one's from you. I am not sure if I will have time to catch up what's going on around here since I am playing catch up on comments made on my poems. I hope you are still writing!
Lotsa Love, Steve -
This was beautiful. Simply beautiful and honest. Hugs and bites, Lady Raven
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wow...this was amazing....
Has been a whirlwind...wonderful write
Sam
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these words that were spoken to my heart from my little shadow changed me inside,
"Asphyxiate on your warm embrace
lost in the cross-roads of your eyes
Gaze into the true beauty below the face.
underneath your external disguise.
Focus only on that lovely mind
undesiring of a matching physique
Flattered endlessly, you're too kind
My heart is always yours to keep.
Knew from the start it was fantasy
yet when it's all said and done it's clear
It wasn't meant to be a harsh reality
and also not something to shed this tear.
Though the relationship wasn't meant to be
I can't help but weep in the happy memory
Of how much I loved you and you loved me
left here now in my own selfish misery."
~~chelsey must not had comprehended these words. my love never left you. chelz was only partly right to blame kristi. i know that the shadow (you) and kristi are truly in love with me. a man sometimes never finds no one that is in love with him, but i honestly feel loved by you both. do you know that shoots my self-esteem almost to a passing level on a grading scale. if this keeps up, i might not have a self-esteem problem any more. thank you for loving me and opening up. i know itz hard for you to do it, but you have done a marvelous job so far! shadow aka (sharon best (the name i made up 4 her and she knows why))i love you, DARK (jim)
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*NOTE* Please understand that I'm not trying be mean when I say this, but doesn't it seem like everyone loves DARK...hehe. He's so cuddley. You are a very lovely lady, and they way you've reacted to all that has happened within the last month or so, makes me very proud to know you, and one poet that I truly can say is someone to look up to. You're so true and innocent with your emotions in this poem. Love, so complicated, so... ugly at times... but in the end completely worth-while, even if the one you love isn't with you, but happy for his lifetime. Great write, I truly loved it.
Lotsa love..........................................CalmWaters.
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I am glad that you spoke your mind. Too many times people won't do this and give up something they could have had. I think it's honorable! I hope everything will work out for you.
Lotsa Love,
Steve -
lots of emotion had a few tears in my eyes..hope that all works out for the best..peace be with you always..
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Beautiful words that speak so much
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This is a great one!!! it is sometimes hard to write a poem like that and have it rhyme, but you did it beautifully!! really well written!!
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This is so beautiful! Its so heartfelt the emotion is just pouring off the page. And the presentation is perfect. I love it.
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Different(in my language, that means great)
I feel alot of this right now...I can't love someone whom i love so much.
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wonderful story within Friends, Tracy
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