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[ Ohhhh how ]

Oh the first kiss,
from my first love was bliss,
but that love decided to dismiss.

 

I found another,

who was not like the other,

our love was further.

 

They were more passionate,

like a new fire was lit,

I love him more I admit.

 

His love was amazing,

it seemed like it was blazing,

almost hair raising.

 

My first love was not my last,

so I say no matter what have a blast,

don't live in the past.

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  • Frodofan silver member
    July 27, 2008

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    Yes it is. Not bad. The rhythm is a little blunt. You could smooth it out a bit, but good overall. Thanks for entering.