Dark and alone i stare at the wall
These demons, i wait for their call
Pacing and wasting all this time
I need to feed the hunger that is growing inside
Scratching at my skin, blood thristy thoughts
Fuck what the doctor told me, he doesnt know what hes talking about
Throwing my medication, fuck my probation, I need to get out of this hell hole
I wait till i see the sight of the house
Grab it by the screens and rip out its locks
Busting in like i was welcome
I grab the grip of my lovely hatchet
Go up stairs and what do i find
A silent family in their slumber
No place to hide
These feelings just keep getting stronger
The voices in my head keep telling me im doing wonderful
They dance around me as i creep slowly to the bed
I hit her right in the chest and listened to her scream
Blood was pouring and i kept scoring
Every hit lead to her death
I finished her off when my blade touched her soft neck
I watched her bleed and i went to the next room
Children sleeping in their delight
I grabbed my shot gun and pointed with the all my might
Shot them both, one by one
Now im left in my bloody mess
Coming back to my senses, i realized what i had done
I had to grab the bodies fast, or it would be me with the last laugh
I buried them deep in the woods
My demons laughing at me telling me i did a good job
I dont know what to do
But they make me kill and i still return
to the plot of earth i undig every night
Killing people is my sickness
Author notes
opt. 2
A contest entry
- Am I crazy? {Options!!} by sins and sorrow.
575 points, ended August 3, 2008, 27 entries
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Comments
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nice flow, very dark, i liked it.
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Wow so impactually demonic!
Wow so impactually demonic! This is so powerfully and poetically graphic that it makes you feel as if you are fighting the bettle for this poor soul in torment! Brilliant vivid imagery and well used and chosen graphic descriptives and expression, huge power and a work of phenomenal poetic artistry. Fabulously well penned! Well done love it bravo!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
Ps: Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
Glad you liked it. It is a great honour to enter your wonderful contest thanks for the honour and the privalege.
Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
Kaz.XX
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Damn this was a super scary read!
I loved every word of it though!
Such vivid imagery, so filled with gore and destruction!
You nailed the option right on the head!
This is definately schizophenia!!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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Interesting....
Interesting style. I am a fan of dark poems and bad things happening. It's good to see im not the only kid of writer that does that. Ill be honest you could have used some more emotion with in certain parts. Example could be like how the mind felt before and after kills and how they would respond the demons. Just trying to give some kind of advice.
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