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Fractured Truths

-i-
We took to the West bound highway
like devils in the night.
Motors purred a rhythm beneath the
screeching tires as we raced.
Flying around every corner life threw at us
Strapped in with youth and invincibility,
we soared.
& for a moment we were weightless.
Then we crash landed in reality.

-ii-
Every boulevard of broken dreams
was lined with charred deck chairs
and splintered swing sets.
Twisted metal sculptures stood like
gods in the night.
Their shadows chasing away the
thieves. Running, hiding
burlap sacks filled with stolen childhood
and tainted innocence.

-iii-
We stopped by a forgotten playground
to catch our breath and reinvent
the laws of inertia.
You sat like a king on decrepit
monkey bars finger printed with
broken bones [broken hearts]
I was your queen of spades
as I perched precariously on a
rotting child's swing.
Aged without summers of laughter
and ice cream smeared upon it's chains.
But I felt like another joker
as I swung too fast.
Alternating my weight and
letting my feelings flow.
everything I said was lost in
translation as you shot the moon.

-iv-
The stars cried hope that night
while the daffodils wept silent tears.
Acidic tantrums frayed my edges until
I flapped gently in the wind like
antique lace.
Wishing to be the bonnet on mother goose.
Willingly dragged back into nursery
rhymes I tried to scream.
But all that came out was a gasp
as you, the handsome prince,
stole the heart of the scullery maid.

-v-
Now I take to heaven's stairway
like a devil angel in the night.
But all I am is another oxymoron
dancing alone in a gown of
fractured truths.

Author notes

Option one.
"Take a bow and exit stage left"
The only Alice In Wonderland reference was the cards..but even that was rather vauge.
This is my wonderland of the future painted for you.
A place of rotting happiness and long forgotten childhood
Morbid much?
Enjoy

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  • Jfd
    February 3

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    "-iii-
    We stopped by a forgotten playground
    to catch our breath and reinvent
    the laws of inertia.
    You sat like a king on decrepit
    monkey bars finger printed with
    broken bones [broken hearts]
    I was your queen of spades
    as I perched precariously on a
    rotting child's swing.
    Aged without summers of laughter
    and ice cream smeared upon it's chains.
    But I felt like another joker
    as I swung too fast.
    Alternating my weight and
    letting my feelings flow.
    everything I said was lost in
    translation as you shot the moon."

    that was my favorite part.....great imagery and style! thank you for taking the time to enter.


  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    October 25, 2008

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    Very good use of the Dirty Pretty form. =] Excellent emotions, Nicely written. Good luck and thank you for the entry.

    x-Pretty-Odd-x <3


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 24, 2008
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    Oh, & could you please put your Allpoetry Name in your AN? Thanks

  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 24, 2008

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    Ohkay, so wow. Everything about this poem was just wow. I love your form of dirty-pretty. You wrote this so uniquely and you make the reader feel as if they're there, in that place and time.

    -We stopped by a forgotten playground
    to catch our breath and reinvent
    the laws of inertia.
    You sat like a king on decrepit
    monkey bars finger printed with
    broken bones [broken hearts]
    I was your queen of spades
    as I perched precariously on a
    rotting child's swing.
    ...

    Definitely my favorite part. Beautifully written. Nothing more needs to be said. I love your extensive vocabulary, by the way. =] It makes the poem a lot more powerful. I can see why you won gold & silver on this. Thanks for entering ♥


  • TenShadesOfPale
    July 27, 2008
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    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • Enkeli
    July 27, 2008

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    Wonderful.

    I can't even really think of anything to say... it's perfect.

    Morbid, but wonderfully so, and worded beautifully.

    Are you a fan of AFI? Something about this put me in mind of the poem at the end of "...But Home Is Nowhere" on AFI's Sing the Sorrow album. It's a hidden track, and is one of my all time favorite pieces of poetry. It carries that same... feel to it, same sense.

    Love it.
    ~Enkeli


    • incondite
      July 28, 2008
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      No, I've never listened to AFI.
      But thankyou very much for the comment.

      -Steph

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