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four car pile up

4 cars
blood curtling screams
the impact of no breaks
glass shattering
bodys thrown to the cold hard ground
a sudden frenzy of lights, people
disorentation of the mind
brusing, bleeding
all because of one morron
couldnt stop on red

Author notes

i know its not my best, but i had to write something about the accident i just witnessed. all because one stupid person didnt want to stop at a red light, a baby was ejected from a car, 2 others had to be cut out of one of the cars due to how badly smashed in it was, 8 fire trucks, 6 cop cars, 5 ambulences, 4 streets blocked off. what is wrong with humanity?!

it angers me so much

at so point i'll probably revise this but at the moment its going to stay this way

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  • xxemoxprincessxx
    August 7, 2008
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    wow its amazing
    anyone can tell alot of emotion was put into this
    i like it very much

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    August 5, 2008

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    WOW

    so much said in so few lines and yet the pain and suffering is felt...I to have seen the after maths of someones stupid decision's...always in a hurry and no thought for others!....Niaish so much for sharing this and i hope many will read


  • LostInAdulthood
    July 30, 2008

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    This is a very short, but a very good poem. It really is amazing the way you wrote this. Great job on this one.
    ~W.W~


  • Candy Morphine
    July 30, 2008

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    wow.
    this is breath-taking.
    there is so much beauty in the simplicity!
    can't wait to read more of your poems!


  • newnoakua
    July 30, 2008

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    Damn... that's really good. Short, but still good. Alot, alot is wrong with humanity.

    Good job!!!


  • Nephlim
    July 27, 2008

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    It's always wonderful to be able to write on real life experiences, and portray the feelings you have for it, and the feelings of the people who experienced it. Car accidents are horrible things
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • Angierie
    July 27, 2008

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    Ok this may be short.. but it made me cry hardcore...
    images of my ex's car accident and of my four or my good friends a year (to the day) later.
    Amazingly relateable.
    ~~AngieMarie


    • Silent Emotions
      July 27, 2008

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      thank you for commenting. accidents like this are definatly hard to watch let alone go through, like you did with someone you cared about. thank you again though for commenting

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