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Life Squared

 

 

 

Dreams are filled with our heart’s desire

And our soul is the voice that blares

Messages that occasionally burn like fire

Often hotter than raging solar flares

 

For that which haunts us most with strife

Seems to fill our thoughts each day

As we struggle along the path called life

Wondering, “Is this the right way?”

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 10, 2008

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    Thanks very much for a terrific entry, I am totally confidant I have only ever approached life the wrong way, much more fun!

    I'm sorry it has taken me so long to get to all the entries in this, one of my favourite contests to date.


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    This is great

    Congrats in my book you've already won. I'm entered too and am in for a heck of a time with you around. Good luck, Boog


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    July 28, 2008

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    Outstanding use of metaphor...

    I love this melancholy, existential masterpiece!!! Best of luck in this contest!!! Peace, Cyn


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    July 27, 2008
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    Nice job. Short but pithy.


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 27, 2008
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    This was bloody excellent! Factual in many peoples minds including myself; it spoke to me well. I love the rhyme and concept of this and how it the message is conveyed by metaphors in the descriptions. Wonderful work, I love it! Good luck in the contest

    ~Emily~ xx


  • Gwenevere
    July 27, 2008

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    How true.We tend to focus on the negatives but if we can rise above them we find the pathis much easier to walk.Who knows what the right way is.The road of life has many twists and turns.Sometimes we take the wrong turning, so we have to retrace our steps and try again, Ros


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    July 27, 2008

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    Well, I think you wrapped your thoughts up very neatly here dear and your rhyme was a joy to read out loud for me...the one who never rhymes

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret

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