Crossed your heart, hoped to die,
stuck a needle in your eye.
Trusted you, bad mistake,
now my heart is forced to break.
Lie, lie, lie some more,
see the pain that you adore.
Take advantage, tear me down,
leave me in my pain to drown.
Made a promise, one you'd "keep",
got passed my wall, dug in deep.
Broke it once, broke it twice,
you have turned my heart into ice.
Three times now and you struck out,
make one more, but I have doubt.
Go ahead and break it,
I'm no longer gonna take it.
Crossed your heart, hoped to die,
filled my head with every lie.
Trusted you, bad mistake,
now I know that you were fake.
Author notes
"Cadaver Cafe: Special Today- GraveRobber Goulash"
A contest entry
- Punching Holes In Hapiness by FakingItForReal.
300 points, ended July 28, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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For the sake of the flow I would change:
"you have turned my heart to ice."
to:
"you have turned my heart into ice."
The all time beast lines were:
"Crossed your heart, hoped to die,
filled my head with every lie."
I think this could be a lot better once you become more experienced in the art of poetry.
You have massive potential to be a good writer one day
Good luck,
Keep writing! -
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Thank You.
Awww thanks.
I hope I do get better. Thanks for your time. =]
~Alana~
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