A single teardrop wins the battle
not to be contained
Only to evaporate
and fall again as rain
The dust that's blowing in the wind
once walked among the trees
The secrets that were never shared
now whisper in the breeze
How many lonely dreams
lay in the soil that we sow
How many broken hearts
are in the roses that we grow
How many waves have washed away
the footprints we have tread
How many bones must crumble
just to make our daily bread
The air that we are breathing
has brought life to those before
The sunshine we are feeling
will not be forevermore
The water in our bodies
will depart us one day soon
The colors in a rainbow
are all made from me and you
We are the lives that lived before
and those still yet to come
A spirit still forever shared
from whom we all are from
Some say our souls continue on
and maybe that is true
But part of us will always stay
this earth, is me and you
Author notes
Option # 6 - What is the nature of god.
A contest entry
- What is the answer to life, universe and everything? by Dark Otter.
600 points, ended August 12, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like it! Simple language, easy to follow and understand, excellent flow and good rhyme. I feel the same as you do. My favourite line is:'A spirit still forever shared" Well done.
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Thank you my poet friend, I'm glad you could relate.
Much appreciated.
Antonio
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Dust thou art, and to dust thou shalt return!
This is more the nature of what we are, which can be argued is the essence of God. This is the first entry, that has a more poetic turn. It is worth a second read for its use of visual imagery to descibe philosophical constructs. "NOT BAD" is my response. The essence of what we are returns to the earth. A permanent recycle of spirit. Thank you, for your entry.
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Not bad, (maybe not so good either lol), somewhere, in-between, right in the middle of the mix, that works for me.
Thank you poet for your kind words.
Antonio
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Hi! Just wanted to let you know
that 'not bad' is pretty good for me. I have this piece as being in the top third. It does hit pretty close to the mark for me. -
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Thanks Amazira, no hey, no offense was taken whatsoever with the not bad reply. I'll take a not bad any day. It sure is alot better than not good lol.
Thanks though for the second note to clarify what you meant. Yes, some people's, not bad, means more than others, thanks again, no worries.
Antonio
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Okay, three, "lovely's" from three lovely ladies... hey I'll take it.
Thank you C for the kind words, it's nice to meet you.
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This has a lovely soft lilt to it, the rhyme scheme doesn't sound forced at all. It is a very nice job. Love, C
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I agree with kiwi - this is lovely! I really like your wording - and the images. I like it all, but especially,
'We are the lives that lived before
and those still yet to come
A spirit still forever shared
from whom we all are from'....and I really like the lst verse too!
best wishes in your contest.
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Thank you aboomer I'm glad you liked it.
Antonio
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Ohh..this is just lovely! I feel a sense of everything in life being connected and the cycle of life continuing regardless of whether we have finished our own earthly course.
Some beautiful descriptions in here.. my favourite is the second stanza but the whole write is really lovely, thoughtful and has a sense of serenity!
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Oh you sweet thing you, you actually forced yourself to read one of these poor excuses for verse. And then you felt compelled to say something nice too... bless you and your selfless ways... lol.
Yeah I guess it's got a few things to think about if you really try hard enough. Thank you Kiwi Girl, you really are too kind you know.
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