Cold as carved stone,
He kneels all alone.
A tender glance;
His spirits dance.
A crack appears.
It has been years
Since he felt free
Like he used to be.
Author notes
Picture Prompt: http://mmebuterfly.deviantart.com/art/sadness-18304153
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt (PIF) by kiwigirljacks.
575 points, ended July 27, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great write here
Indeed I see beyond this write as a person riddled with a addiction and he crawls his way to freedom he thought was lost forever
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I am glad that you enjoyed the poem. It is sometimes hard to write a short poem with meaning.
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Interesting combination of insights. Sometimes we make ourselves stony and cold, to bear our burdens or hide hurt. Such a small thing as a "tender glance" or smile of notice can strengthen us in surprising ways. And how often we speed by opportunities to give such kindnesses to another human soul! Well-rhymed reminder.
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Thank you. I was the stone man for years. I have found someone who smiles at me again.
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Good take on the picture.I have a feeling that he will light up the world, Ros
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Thank you for reading and commenting. The applause is appreciated. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
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NICE
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Glad you liked it.
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Ahh yes.. the feeling of not being free is a heavy weight indeed!! Nice take on the picture
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I enjoyed the prompt.
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wow nicely done cousin.. you always have an excellent way with dark even though its not your topic...I loved it!
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"Grins" My dark almost always has a silver lining. This one is that the crack has appeared after she smiled, allowing him to regain some of life's pleasure.
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Superb
Ah, 'tis a fine write indeed. Imagery, rythm and rhyme are most excellent. This poem depicts my feelings after I finally gave up the philosophy best expressed in an old song: "I am a Rock", by Simon and Garfunkel.
For those not familiar with Simon & Garfunkel,
here is a link to both the lyrics and chords:
http://www.guntheranderson.com/v/data/iamarock.htm
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Simon_&_Garfunkel
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Thank you. I know the song well. I used to own a few of their records on vinyl.
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Cools.
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Wow Chucks, quite the nice take on the prompt! Good luck my friend!! Great rhyme!
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Thanks. I am glad you liked the poem. The picture was a great prompt, but I struggled to write the poem.
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