I never got to say good-bye,
No memories of fond farewell,
We never shared a parting tear,
Nor final kiss our pain to quell,
No last moment within your arms,
No tender hand upon my face,
I never got to say good-bye,
And you're a ghost I'll always chase.
I never got to say hello,
I never looked into your eyes,
No longing touch within the night,
No times of soft and gentle sighs,
No walks upon a sandy shore,
Oh how, oh how was I to know,
I'd never get to say good-bye,
I'd never get to say hello.
Author notes
option 4
A contest entry
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Comments
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nicely done
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Aw. this was beautiful. I really liked how you set it up. And the picture is so cute.
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This is beautiful. Hellos are nice, sometimes goodbye is necessary though painful. It has wonderful rhyme and flow ... it reads aloud very well although probably better when done by the author. Thank you for entering.
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I think this is a terrific poem, unique, clever, beautiful.
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say goodbye and cut the fucking cord already so there can be peace and closure.
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Just loved it ...
the flow, the style and mostly the thoughts shared, one that I found so close to my own! I have added you to my favorites as somehow I've missed your name and poetry before. j
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Another superb write.Many I am sure will relate to this excellent poem......The words just sit there inside my head and I wonder.....Very well written...mal
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Excellent stuff. Good luck in the contest
It feels like the start and end to a song...
Commenting your poems is annoying because your poems say so much more than I can, and I've got the freedom of not writing in rhyme!
Grr
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What a good write!!
Considering the option you have put this in, I completely understand the feeling. And I have to say, you have put the feelings into words in such an amazing way.
I also love the way your title and your first lines are opposites, the "hello" and "goodbye" bit
Well done, thanks for entering and good luck!
Rebecca
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This is beautiful and has so much truth in it. I'm looking at it from two directions: If we get to know someone, feel their touch etc, then it is hard to say goodbye. On the other hand, if we never get to know them and the opportunity passes us by ... then we are left always wishing. Just my perspective. Anyway, beautiful.
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Very good read! Gets my mind wandering to all different scenarios.
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Ohhhhhh, boy, how I can relate! And with the one I speak of, having passed on, it runs even deeper for me. You did a wonderful job showing the pain, of never knowing in this one... Oh boy did you!!
Thanks for saying what I have not been able too.
Best of luck in this contest!
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Wow, beautiful sad piece. The rhythm and rhyming are great, and it paints a picture colored with many emotions, that I'm sure many can relate to. The background and picture above help add to the imagery. Nice job. Best of luck in the contests
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Aww, what a beautifully sad write, and so strongly done. I love the background, and how it adds to the poem without distracting anything from it. Such a beautiful poem that I thing everyone, of this cyber generation, can somehow relate to.
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Wow, this is an amazing write, so full of emotion and so very sad. Good luck in the contest, great write.
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the words reveal some painful detachment...enjoyed it
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This was beautiful.. Really beautiful..The flow of this really just melted your words into the heart of the reader. Brought tears to the eyes really.. You did such a wonderful job.. Thank you very much for sharing.. and best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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i really like this poem!
the flow is smooth and deep thoughts are apparent
great work with the writing and good luck in the contests!
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this is beautiful it shows the longing of being close to someone. That you never got close enough to say hello, but were longing by the time you missed your goodbye. now you can say neither and never will get to. I can feel the strong sadness and longing in this piece. So beautiful! "Oh how was I to know i'd never get to say good-bye i'd never get to say hello" That is so beautiful in the sence of love. Bravo!
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this is beautiful and passionate. well done!
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Wonderfully poignant and flowed so smoothly; really enjoyed this one - best of luck in the contest with it!
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So full of sadness and longing. Beautifully written.
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Wow! This is just full of powerfully sad emotion. I loved every single word. The rhyme scheme was right on and it's just amazing
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Very nice poem, and romantically sad.
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Just a wonderful piece.
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^.^
Good job on this one, I liked how long it was, though, it confused me at first, then made sense at th eend, because you don't get much meaning from the title until the end, whic I sort of expected to come sooner, but go figure, it is you after all... =]
Well, until next time you young whipper snapper
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Amazing...I wish I can be as good as you one day
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