i cannot see the stars
for you have scratched out my eyes
i can't even see
my own reflection
i don't need drugs to make my life tragic
blank spaces produce lithium tears
and i seem soulless as you
look into my deep beyond
i don't need drugs to make my life tragic
my soul screams for you've cut out my tongue
and no one can hear any sign of agony
i am silenced to your liking
i don't need drugs to make my life tragic
i cannot speak of your demon like face
or how you like to break me down
i am like glass shattered
just the way you like it
i don't need drugs to make my life tragic
for you have done that all too well
Author notes
i don't need drugs to make my life tragic , eddie vedder
A contest entry
- Musical Quotes by Bean Sidhe.
1500 points, ended August 9, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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ouch! a sad, hard and harsh reality done in poetry form here, a lover's lament of sorts most deftly done throughout... very fine!!
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Eddie Vedder is my sons' favorite singer, and I enjoy some of his music too...The lithium is a familiar drug, for a family member, and I know all too well, all associated with it...lots of pain for the other family members too...
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excellent~
Penned so very excellent....
I love these lines:blank spaces produce lithium tears
and i seem soulless as you
look into my deep beyond
Hugs
Susan~~~
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This is another of what I call "the bottom of a bottle write" a painful state of mind caused by life itself. I enjoyed the read. Happy trails and shivers.
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u did this very well i got lost in my mine a little but very good keep writing like this in inspire more people like me
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wowsers... i'd say this piece spells broken and sad all so clearly...
very well written.
i like the repetition of 'i don't need drugs to make my life tragic' i think it had an excellent effect to adding to the strength of the poem... to depicting the whole whole unhappy ending of it all... the fact that it was tragic, and the drugs would only make it worse. i wonder if "lithium" here refers to the medication... and then in turn refers to the 'don't need drugs to make me life..." line.
really enjoyed reading it
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nicely written
I like it and the menaing behind it. I can relate to it coming out of a relationship where he made my life so tragic for me. Although I was wondering doesn't lithium make life less tragic seeing as it helps with depression and bipolar. I dont know maybe i am getting a mixed message. Either way I really liked this a lot. My applause to you!
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insightful
I like the theme of we don't need any drug to make life tragic as there are plenty of people willing to do it for us. It reminds me of two people trying to make the right call on who is responsible for both people being miserable. Certainly reminded me of a similar experience. Nice job!
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"i can't even see
my own reflection"
That's a great line about how a damaging relationship can be so blinding--even muddling introspection. -
"blank spaces produce lithium tears
and i seem soulless as you
look into my deep beyond"
Nice Job! Thank you for your entry & good luck!
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