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Lacking realization...

Missing image
Shell assertions often falter
against dim-troubled vision
& ill-coated echoes heard
when petals refuse sunlight
& strong stems deny vibrations
not meant to be critically understood

We crack under expanding nothingness
never realizing its utter worthlessness
prone more to those loudspeakers
which blare misery's cruel harsh decibels
paying little heed to those softer whispers
which carry the whole kernel of truth
 
  
 
 

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http://mmebuterfly.deviantart.com/art/sadness-18304153

60 words.. could have been longer.

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  • notorious gold member
    July 27, 2008
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    Hell yeah

    Kicked my ass like Buffy--awesome! Congrats


  • nature
    July 27, 2008
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    If this is good

    I am truly Zapped,
    Mapped and crapped.


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      July 27, 2008
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      huh? lol

      Thanks for reading.

      • nature
        July 27, 2008
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        lol

        can't blame you for the write.It is excellent in thought form and words.
        It is the judging fault.
        Give a picture and talk about abstract, good?
        Define the take then see a higher plain, fair?
        Place ground rules, and walk with the winds?
        Hold contests knowing not what you ask, true?
        Look at the sun walking to the moon.
        Crack with the light break this statue
        in emotions
        Wide
        agonized?

        Fine.

        Your points your agony.


        • kiwigirljacks gold member
          July 27, 2008
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          There is no fault in the judging nor the set-up of the contest. Each person writes about what they see in the picture, no definition is necessary from the judge.. for it is the poet's task to delve into a prompt and draw whatever inspiration from it they find... not the judges to define!

          This entry delved deep and went beyond... a magnificant piece of poetry.


          • nature
            July 27, 2008
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            lol

            Your contest,
            your judgment
            your problem.

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 27, 2008

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    Simply amazing! We do crack under that.. when we don't listen to the whispers but bear the loudness and try sometimes to understand or disset things that perhaps need not be agonized over so much.

    Love this!


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    Your words always light up the page with brilliance brother dear. You have out done yourself yet again. My muse choked on this prompt..but man did yours shine

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 26, 2008
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    Great job Marky as always goodluck you

  • notorious gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    You are SUCH a crack whore for entering Mark!!

    I love this (duh).
    "Shell assertions often falter"
    Okay, nice use of 'shell', & unlikely use as well...Great strong opening.

    "dim troubled"
    Adopt a hyphen in between please.

    "ill-coated echoes"
    Makes me think of naked echoes...LMFAO

    "not meant to be critically understood"
    Does that mean I shouldn't tell you why I liked this line?

    "expanding nothingness"
    Sounds like a canyon of boredom, but poetic of course.

    "to those softer whispers"
    Makes me think of plebeians. You are so talented. Damn you!

    "the whole kernel of truth"
    I hear the pop of popcorn faintly...Orville Redenbaucher (however the hell you spell his frucking last name...heh, 'fruckin').

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