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Eternal Storm

The wounded sky splitting apart
raining the black
tears of regret.

Pain
kneeling before
the final ranks of broken torture.

Thunder ripping the sky
in it's fury
losing the final sacrifice in a
quest for freedom.

 

 

Illuminating the shattered hope
free will torn by death
as the final drops of blood
splinter the damned.

Carnaged for the sake mankind
the petals of the soul
are ripped of dreams
as the ruby drops of blood
are plunged in to the heart
of suicide...

Author notes

So you know I read the rules...
  I can't shake this little feeling...

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  • shelly webster
    August 6, 2008

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    This was very dark. The thunder ripping through the sky verse was probably my favorite one.

    Thanks for entering.


  • emotearsofsorrow
    July 28, 2008
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    i loved it...its true

    u r a far better writer than i am.


  • FireBurnsAlone
    July 26, 2008

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    This poem is really, a step up from your other ones since the language and the emotions seem different than your other poems. This is by far my favorite of your poems!


  • peregrin
    July 26, 2008

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    This is brilliant, I really really like it a lot.
    Dude, it is like screaming "THIS DESCRIBES ME!" from it!
    I really like it.

    "Carnaged for the sake mankind
    the petals of the soul
    are ripped of dreams
    as the ruby drops of blood
    are plunged in to the heart
    of suicide..."

    OMG it is amazing!