I couldn't tell from her tears
Nor could I tell from her eyes
I couldn't tell from the way she smiled
Or from her tired sighs
She seemed normal as ever
But scared, and aged with pain
When talking her voice broke apart
As if she couldn't gain
Something new had happened
I was at a loss with her
Felt as though she'd been replaced
But still, my head would stir
I couldn't tell from her actions
Nor could I tell from her touches
I couldn't tell from her body
Or from her weakened clutches
I kept on watching, wondering
And found to my surprise
She cried when I was absent
And was full of strong, dark lies
She left a note next Sunday
She was gone before I woke
I missed her even before her leave
And wished she could have spoke
I couldn't tell from her tears
Nor could I tell from her birds
I couldn't tell from her laughter
Or from her final words.
Author notes
This is a random poem about a stressed out girl trying to break up with her oblivious boyfriend. Weird huh? I honestly don't know why it rhymes, all I know is that it started rhyming and I had to work hard to keep it that way. But I like it all the same. Hope you guys do too! -_^
~Cj
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That's some of the best rhyme I've come across. It's very natural and it flows nicely. Great write sis!
-Dlvvanzor
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Wow! You described a this situation very well. It can be very hard for a girl to break up with a guy. I love how this is from the guys point of view too! This is just amazing sis! Good job with this. The emotions are so so strongly conveyed and feel so real. This is just, awesome! Great job sis! Love you!
♥Chelsea
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Nice! Very good conveyance of what you were trying to say...it almost has the feel of a song. Nice rhymes and rhythm, too. Brilliant as always, and it's nice to read something new from you!
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Wow babe! this is really sad but I really like it. I swear i was almost crying by the end. Great job!
Love you bunches!
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