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The Cell

I'm dying here inside
The prison of my mind
The pain that I feel
Forms bars of steel
That I cannot break
How much can I take
The ever rising tide
Of the tears I've cried
Fills my lonely cell
My own private hell
Where escape is a dream
And insanity reigns supreme
As my silent screams
Echo endlessly

A contest entry

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  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    June 5

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    it reminds me of my poem i wrote long ago, and the message we wrote are very similar. strong points. thanks for sharing.


  • A-Solitary-Fantasy
    May 10

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    this is a great write. Beautiful rhyme scheme, poetry in its simplest form if done right is the best form.


    • PandorasBox
      May 10
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      Thank you lol I tend to favor keeping them short- when I go longer mine just seem to sound too contrived & I feel like I lose the emotion


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    April 28

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    Sometimes simple poetry just makes sense. Your rhyme was very simple but it flowed beautifully well done. Best to you in the contest


    • PandorasBox
      May 7
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      Thank you- I totally tend to write exactly what I'm feeling at the time...its great when it comes together just how I want it to & when others appreciate also!


  • Firequeen
    April 27

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    Short sweet and to the point
    This is a great write
    i like the honesty in it
    Amazing
    thank you for your entry
    fire


    • PandorasBox
      May 7
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      Thank you my friend! Sorry for the late response...things have been hectic lately in my world so its my 1st time on here in a bit


  • Dmonik
    April 20
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    Thanks for your entry

    'D'


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    April 18
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    nicely done, but unfortunately I have to DQ you since you already have another trophy.

  • Rasputin
    March 15

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    good

    this is a very well put together piece of writing and it expresses the state of your mind very well. by writing about it hopefully you'll find some peace within, well done


    • PandorasBox
      April 2
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      Thank you! Lol, writing is the best & most inexpensive form of therapy I can think of...for me its an excellent way to work out my feelings & if it touches someone else all the better


  • dreams of a gypsy
    March 12
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    loved it coniune writing this is a beautiful poem


  • Selestial
    March 8

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    This expresses something very deep. I can feel the angst and pent up frustration. I do feel like the flow is interrupted is at line 5, though I am not sure how I would fix it.

    Other then that, for me a very good, flowing read that expresses much! Good job!

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