Unflinching eyes regard
another ‘taking,’
artist
capturing heavenly silver,
turquoise sky,
finery
displayed against living
red landscape
supported
by her child’s
rough, capable
hands.
Author notes
Picture prompt: http://www.allposters.com/-sp/Silversmith-s-Daughter-Navajo-Girl-Posters_i815197_.htm
A contest entry
- hay (na) ku poetry contest by carole21.
750 points, ended July 28, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Do you like the song, Blower's Daughter- by Damien Rice? I dare not say or play it with my son around. It was the song he fell in love to. She moved on...
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I couldn't see the picture Either but you put enough into the poem so I could see a mother and child who plays with her silver beads, and set it in a rough red landscape.
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Hoodwinked
I am on free membership so I can't see the picture. I liked your metaphors and your vivid imagery. Good luck to you on the contest. -
Hood-Winked!
I love where you took the prompt with this piece
very beautiful imagery and a wonderful feel to the poem as a whole - the ending was by far my favorite part and I thought it was very well crafted!
Keep writing
Polly
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HOODWINKED!!!
well written poem that stands alone and matches the photo. thank you for sharing your amazing talent. keep writing dear poet! God bless you always
you have been hoodwinked by the poetic bandits
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Nicely captures the occupation of a native silversmith.
I can envision the colors of the stones and silver "taken" from the landscape. Lovely metaphor.
Actually, I wrote this before I wrote the review. The "taking" refers to the photograph of the little girl.
Now this poem has multiple layers of meaning for me.
We saw a show recently of an artist who took these types of photos. The camera took up to 2 minutes of exposure time, so the subject had to sit very still. I suppose this may be a hand tinted photo also. It looks like this type of photo would. She seems to be an ad for her mother's work.
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A piece of verse as finely crafted
as the silver jewelry on the little Navajo girl, Mirthryl. You did a superb job of translating the child's gaze (it IS serious and unyielding) against the splendid colors of her clothing, jewelry, and background. I particularly like the comment on her wee hands placed ... just ... so.
Lovely piece. Did you win this contest -- I cannot tell.
-- Caroligné
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well written for the prompt . . thanks for the other copy of the prompt and for the contest entry
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You looked deeply into the picture and caught the inspiration behind it. Well done!
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I like the way you put these together in a chain yet kept the story going so well. this is very nice. Good luck in the contest
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It's a very nice piece. It appears yours is the only true take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest and happy trails
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