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Behind Her Smile

Behind her smile, hides a frown
How amazing she can lie without making a sound
How amazing she can cry with no tears to be found
How amazing she can die with a heart that still pounds
Behind her smile, hides a frown
But how dare she let the pain bring that smile on down

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  • dreamersalwayslive
    July 28, 2008

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    Wonderful

    Very easy to follow, and yet thought-provoking. Periods should probably be placed on the end of some of the lines; though. Overall, great poem!


  • michichoeret
    July 27, 2008
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    great

    very well depicted
    easy to identify with
    like "mute screaminmg", "dry tears" etc