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I am not a Spoon

The look on your face

tells me you're confused.
I shake my head in disbelief.

How can you not see

that I can only

bend so far?

 

I feel my will crack and splinter

under the pressure of your gaze.

Your not-so-innocent pleading

shatters my inhibitions.

 

I let myself rip.

I seem to be exploding.

I can't hold on

to any part of me.

 

Can't you see?

I am not a spoon.

If you bend me,

I will break.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • bw43
    March 7
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    wow... this was awesome i enjoyed it very much!


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    Nice Metaphor

    I liked the metaphor of the spoon. I almost wanted more; like reflections in the spoon, manipulating the spoon. The spoon metaphor is very intriguing. I really like what you did with it. Give me more of it.

    P.S. I gave up the use of periods in my poetry a long time ago. I don't believe that the same rules as formal and traditional writing has to apply to poetry. Poetry is a style of writing in it's own rank, and also the unique style of the person who writes it. Hey, your style may be to use periods. Just a thought.

    Karen I read the other comments and wanted to add this...


    • reeseXtheXsoldier
      September 29, 2008
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      thanks!

      Thanks so much for you comment! I am glad you enjoyed my art! I hope you will take time to look at some of my other stuff, see if you like it as well!

      Lots of love!

      TFRB


  • z etoile
    September 25, 2008

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    Oh how incredible kinda reminds me of mind over matter trying to bend the spoon with your mind. Will the spoon truely bend? Its all in the mind. Great job!
    MJ


    • reeseXtheXsoldier
      September 29, 2008
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      You're absolutely right! It's all in the mind! Thanks so much for the comment!
      TFRB


  • notorious
    July 26, 2008

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    "Shatteres"-->should be 'shatters'

    I would strongly recommend not capitalizing the beginning of each line--it has a traditionalist look that doesn't offer much freedom. It looks imposing. Since you use periods in your poems, I'd recommend only capitalizing lines that commence AFTER a period.

    Thanks for entering.

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