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My Hero

 

 

 

He was my hero

The man who carried me
down the lighthouse steps

not up, because I was frightened;

I was three years old

and he was my hero

The shy man
my girlfriends giggled about
and embarrassed
whenever they could;

I was a teenager

and he was still my hero

The handsome man
who gave his little girl away
to another man for life;

I was a young woman

he was always my hero

The man who broke my heart
as he lay in a hospital bed
not looking like my hero anymore

just the man I called ‘Dad’
and he died shortly after;

I am his daughter 

 

and he will forever be

my hero

 

 

 


 

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  • awannabepoet
    October 6

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    Sue,

    No words needed here, nothing I could ever say would render this justice. You are a child, a girl, a woman, a daughter and a mighty fine poet.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 7

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      Thank you for your most welcome comment, my Dad was all those things and a friend, but mostly he was my hero

      Sue
      x


  • UncleDunk gold member
    October 4

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    Your poem is loving, cheerful,
    But also made me sad.
    I wonder how my life would be
    If I had had your dad.

    I never would have run away
    Or fight not being mean
    Perhaps I could have been a King
    Like you became a Queen

    You show good fathers do exist
    I'm bitter-sweet, but glad
    I wonder how my life would be
    If I had had your dad.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 5
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      Many thanks for your words, I'm just sorry that you didn't have my Dad as well, I think he would have liked a son, but he just had two daughters and he gave us a stable home life with Mum.

      Sue
      x


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    October 4

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    Hi Sue.....Just found this lovely poem and see you won gold.
    You are very, very lucky to be able to call your dad a hero, I envy you.
    The gold was well deserved.
    Love Lu x


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 5
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      Thanks Lu, Dad was my hero in every sense of the word, a wonderful man.

      Love
      Sue


  • Eric Marsh
    October 4

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    oh sue oh sue....you do have a heart indeed....kidding..a lovely poem..fathers daughters love...wonderful..keep well eric the git lol...keep well babes


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 5
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      Many thanks Eric the Git, I know not everyone is as lucky as I was, but he was a very lovely man.

      Sue
      x


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 2

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    Sue, this is perfect. As a father, I cannot imagine any words said better than these by a daughter. The love you have for the man shines through.

    Mike


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 5
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      Many thanks Mike, my only regret is that maybe I didn't tell him often enough when he was alive just how much I loved him and I wasn't writing poetry then so I couldn't show him, but I think he knew

      Sue
      x


  • Pattiboo silver member
    October 1

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    I am very glad your father was your hero. A father should always be strong arms and a soft place to fall. My own father was neither when he died I never shed a tear nor did my siblings

    I am so glad for you your father was always your hero


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 5
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      Many thanks Pat, I will always feel blessed that I had a Dad who was everything and more, he had his bad points, but then he was only human after all.

      Sue
      x


  • tara wilson gold member
    September 28

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    oh, i am crying...Sue, i love how you carry us in the poem from you being three to an adult, i get a feel of a lifetime of love here, so beautiful, congrats.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      September 29
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      Many thanks Tara for the comment and the congrats ... it all happened some time ago now, but he was very special and I still miss him to this day and i always will.

      Sue

  • catstar
    September 20

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    This brought tears to my tears to my eyes. Thissounds like a very special relationship with some very treasured memories.

    It was beautifully writen.

    ThanK you for entering and good luck in my contest.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      September 28
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      Thank you for the gold in your contest, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem about Dad, he really was my hero in every sense of the word.

      Sue


  • pop123
    August 31, 2008
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    Good luck,thanks for entering.


  • Angelflower
    August 9, 2008

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    This really brought tears to my eyes.. I am really close to my father, and he is my hero.. I'm sure that this was hard for you to write.. I know it would be really hard for me to write.. But you did such a wonderful job.. I loved the emotions in this write.. So strong and heartfelt.. Thank you very much for sharing.. I really loved this..


    Angel


  • solzhenitsyn08
    August 9, 2008

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    prof. mes/rectifies/yer verse

    Imagine there is a type whom
    You could call the shy man without condom
    Whose girlfriends giggled about-what is up to them?-
    And embarrassed him with classical brainless theme
    Whenever they could!
    I was then a teenager yet not cold.


    Bless,
    prof. Mes


  • Riamh
    August 9, 2008

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    Wow

    That's just so lovely! It did my heart good to read it. I think your hero had a very special lil heroine in his life.

    and he will forever be

    my hero

    Just beautiful. A fitting tribute.


  • Gwenevere
    August 9, 2008

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    Beautiful

    A touching tribute to your own special hero.A memory you can keep and share with others , to show just how special he was, Ros


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    First dear Sue, this made me cried,
    for the love and pain pen into it.

    Then, my heart lifted a bit, for
    this is a wonderful tribute to your father
    from a loving daughter...

    Blessing to you.

    Joann


  • Maxboy gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    A beautiful tribute to your dad. You did very well by him and he did very well by you. It shows how proud you both were of each other.

    You are a wonderful daughter.


  • WhiteAngelCake
    July 28, 2008
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    Great poem! Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck!

    -WhiteAngelCake


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 27, 2008
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    i cried...

    ...love to you, Lane


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 27, 2008

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    On the shoulders of a giant man
    Who ruled the moon and sky
    You knew that you were all his plan
    The apple of his eye
    It didn't ever matter that he wasn't other's god
    He always keep his love for little you
    The way that life will then turn out
    Is always very odd
    We never know the sort of things we'll do
    But blimey if he saw you now
    And read the words you write
    He'd dance the sky (though God knows how)
    And celebrate all night


  • Quill
    July 27, 2008
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    Great tribute Sue


  • arafura gold member
    July 26, 2008
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    Wonderful tribute to your father...and to all fathers. I miss mine too.


  • Rheea gold member
    July 26, 2008
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    ah Miss Sue a hero and always will be. beautiful.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 26, 2008
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    Beautiful

    You are really getting into the groove.


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    July 26, 2008

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    This is a beautiful tribute to your Father Sue and i am sure he would be so proud looking upon you now knowing how his daughteer loved him so all my best wishes Brian.


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    Awww. Its a loving tribute Ms Sue. Yes my grandfather and dad have both been my heros My grandfather passed away about 15 years ago but thankfully my dad is still here and should be for many more years.Its a wonderful poem. You did a great job.

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