As strong as an eagle, frail as a sparrow,
My dark wings spread ‘neath the flowing currents.
Evading darts I melt into shadow,
Dodging arrows, intended deterrents;
With the pride of an eagle, my path is narrow.
A contest entry
- The Eagle Flies Quickie by carole21.
475 points, ended July 26, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I LOVED THIS!!! This is motivation for my week! Evading darts.. and to melt into shadow.. these lines grabbed me and the strong sense of pride you get from reading this poem makes me feel like nothing is impossible!
VERY WELL DONE!
Congratulations on the trophy!
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GREAT
Short and sweet with a punch. Beautifully written "My dark wings spread 'neath the flowing currents." is truely a wonderful line. Your poem is as you say is strong and fragile. At times I felt you whisper then at times raise your voice and shout. A marvelous read. Thank you, Boog
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Excellent, and with a wonderful message as well!
Congrats on the silver!
Love and peace always,
mj.
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This so much in a few lines.. about strength and vulnerability too.. about we all have those aspects to us! I really love this Amera!!
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WOW!!!
this was amazing, you said so much with just a few words, as only you can, I loved the double jearpardy, and the mirror opposites in this, we are all strong and weak and you nailed it with this wonderful poem, should have taken the gold, if you ask me, much love, PL xx and the usual sloppy kiss on the cheek, hehehe
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This is an amazing little poem. You mention strength and vulnerability. You have the currents flowing downward. You have darts rising. Then you speak of the path being narrow, meaning there is a definite purpose to what you do. Very descriptive and meaningful. I can see why you got silver with this. I think this deserved more than the one line comments below. It was well thought out. Have three bunnies.
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wonderfully done.
Love
Passions
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Quicksilver!
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Simply beautiful! Congrats on well deserved silver
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Congrats on your silver!
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I like this poem. It is a great metaphor for America. Nicely done.
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nice use of rhyme . . good descriptions as well . . thanks for the contest entry . .
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That's rather delicious
I like it a lot
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Sis,
This is incredible! I love the images in this one. You never cease to let me down with your writings! Thank you!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Excellent
Wonderful take on the image. So creative and beautifully worded. best of luck in the contest.
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