amber ambiance struck
lightning-
predatory glare;
into darknesss
claws came screeching.
Author notes
Prompt: Pic, 5 lines
A contest entry
- The Eagle Flies Quickie by carole21.
475 points, ended July 26, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Critique Desired.
Comments
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excellent!
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Nice HM
"amber ambiance"
NICE alliterative-ness going on my friend.
"predatory glare"
Simple, but a wonderful physical description of the pic.
I would've given this more than an Hm!!
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Very nice. You have captured the essence of the eagle as a raptor. The imagery is great. I liked this alot.
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A beautifully penned take on the prompt. loved the flow and imagery. Best wishes in the comp
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very original and spontaneous . . thanks for the contest entry . .
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eeek!!!! run!!! lol..
you did a wonderful job.. I really liked the metaphors that you used here. Really made the image more vivid and stuff 
... You did great, I really liked it.. best of luck!
Angel
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Wonderful
Terrific descriptions and images. Best of luck in the contest.
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Very much you! This is creative and deep in metaphor and imagery...nicely done, as always my friend...piont well made in so few words...amazing!
Best,
mystic
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