Calescent surging streams
beckon notions of gestures,
affixes our heeding, singing sweetly.
Once, you whispered. my "best seductions
were anticipated, but not expected."
The dress you wore
did not anticipate immersion;
I knew the pool would pull
you into her. Your dress
would merely concede to
the swelling of fibers
as you glide into
roiling waters.
Your face’s aglow,
water caresses your curves,
illuminating your élan.
Jealous how water’ steals
tactile felicities belonging to
my hands --- tracing the ellipses
of your hips and shoulders.
Oblivious to eyes
I find you in the fount.
Mantras of streams and warmths,
eyes closed, buoyed to sensation,
I move into your fields gently,
knowing now you are in trance.
Rather than compete with your
aqueous lovers, I align with wetness
and tenderly trace dermal luxuries,
slowly bringing you to me.
You inhale my scent
drawing me to you,
and I brush warmed lips
across graceful planes,
pausing at your mouth
to breathe in your ardor.
Your palm and fingers
move down my torso
and find my presence.
Your eyes
pull me into your spirit.
Swells of waters,
melding of beings;
where flesh
joins spirit,
is fulgent light.
A contest entry
- Best Prewrites [Love Poems] Enter now! by perfectsunset.
475 points, ended August 17, 2008, 52 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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uyup..this'd be the one I mentioned yesterday.I couldn't have told you the name. This one's appealing for so-o-o many reasons, and sure the play of sex is there, but there's an undercurrent. THAT'S what's so great about this piece. Riptide. I would have called this riptide, but wht do I know?
And did I say I love it?
uyup.
alot.
this baby sizzles.
you should have placed gold. That's my humble opinion.
fantastic.
jin
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a moment.
I doubt I will write one like this again
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This was brilliant in all aspects of poetry, in my eyes. This piece just left me breathless, and with that.. this was beautiful.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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This was brilliant in all aspects of poetry, in my eyes. This piece just left me breathless, and with that.. this was beautiful.
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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This poem has some really nice moments in it...however, I feel it could be edited down a bit to take unnecessary words out..
thanks so much for entering...
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Thanks ArdentMarch. You feedback echos others, so I started chopping. Thank you.
RW
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Your writing is full to the brim lately with fluid lights. I hope it for you if you've found it D.
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well this was a contest for a sensual piece, and I have not really mastered that, or if that is the criteria (mastery) then I have a long list of development. I was trying to be nice.
memories Jessica. Hopes. Foolishness.
I let too many real emotions surface haven't I. So muich easier to throw the pretty smoke bombs, and duck and slide. sigh.
the lights if there are strobes.
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