On this earth I walk upon,
and ponder when my days are done.
Will I be but a footnote,
or remembered as something other than your son.
Each day as I look in the mirror
it seems to be you looking back.
As the son turns into the dad I lose;
my hair, my looks and where is my 6 pack?
Where did the me I use to be go?
I don't recall how I let this happen I truly just don't know.
Just yesterday I am sure I was but a handsome lad.
But as I look closely at myself today all I see is my dad.
I use to be invincible nothing could get me down.
But these days the slightest cold could put me in the ground.
I can no longer sleep through the night because I have to pee.
And that is just one of a long list of things that bother me.
I realize I am 40 and have seen many moons cross the sky,
I just can't remember the day I became this old fat bald guy.
A contest entry
- Dalaney Contest 7 "Old" by Sue Cardwell.
650 points, ended August 10, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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I like this poem, its really cute and fun to read...
Did I mention scary and true. LOL
Rose -
i like the puppet better!
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just 40??? my dad is 60! and i'm only 15!!! when i'm 21 he will be 66!
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Thank you for your entry in our contest with this interesting poem on the theme 'Old'. The sudden realization of old age is a shock to us all
The contest is for Rhyme and Flow, although you do have some slant thyme and the flow and rhythm is erratic.
Jeff and I are always willing to help should you feel you need us. We look forward to seeing you in future contests.
Sue and Jeff
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well expressed...
Best wishes and good luck
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"You ain't seen nothin' yet,
B-B-B-Baby, you just ain't seen nothin' yet..."
(only joking )
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Yeah it is a shock to the system when you wake up and wonder just who is looking back at you. Time in a bottle. Thank you for the pleasure of this read we can smile, and I did, but there is lessons to be heard....genetics...Brilliant take on the prompt. Good luck in all the contests.
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