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Living desserts



eyes devour
the scent of you

inhaling each touch,
body appeased
hunger sated

until mouths seek
another course







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Option 4 ~ Title is the prompt

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  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 27, 2008

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    oohhhhh, nice, I could make this a five course meal with a few extra lines LOL!



    Len


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    July 27, 2008
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    well done.... well well done...

  • mcfreeman
    July 27, 2008
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    great pun..lots of fun


  • Cannonsfire
    July 26, 2008

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    Don't think you need the comma in the last stanza, you have none in the rest and people will read it as it should be. Nice work here.Love, C