Wind plays
the game of bondage
with his lover
the writhing sea,
then plants breeze kisses
on her form
before he slips away.
Author notes
picture-: wind and sea by Chrisiecool
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt 30 words or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended August 8, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Interesting. I never thought of the sea and wind in quite that way, though I wrote something kind of similar once. This is good! - ocerus
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This is a very brilliant write.. As always, captured what it needs in such short lines
good job Di..
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estranged
Surreal as sea and wind mingle in a ritual...
as if a longing.
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I havnt been here in a while, but it was nice to see a new poem by you when I got back. And as usual, your poem left a vivid image in my mind. I can actually picture the embrace between the two lovers, and the ending leads my mind into imagining what happens next. Beautiful as always, and I'm not surprised
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Within only a few lines there is a story. Great as always my dear friend.
~Sonja~
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wow. That really hit me. Excellent.
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This is exceptionally well-written--both lyrical and lovely.
Bill
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Outstanding
You draw quite a sensual picture here. The flow is excellent and I liked your choice of imagery. The poem compliments the picture perfectly. Best of luck in the contest.
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SO LOVELY!!!!!
I can see if I close my eyes high waves on the wind tossed sea and hear leaves gently rustling in the breeze.
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