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She writes about this and that

 

 

saturday morning after friday night:

smiles, remembers his words

 

how ripe she unpeels

yet his hands will not touch

he says fruit spoils too easily

& his taste buds savour night shades

and colours of her daylight

 

they speak similar;

share laughter

spoon feed each other

with what 'people' call friendship

& how movement climbs ladders of hope

 

                   he - a man's man

                  she - a woman on the curve

 

when they spin

words rise in her hands, to make simple prayers

lost voices unite in syncopated rhythm

 

tells him stories -

about the clicks in her spine

being older now,

there are places in her body that ache

didn't know where or                  when

or if they                                   should

or                                             can

 

place and unfold

where she used to play

with body & soul measured, 

time dances  to the musicality of her mind

back to when her feet were quixotic and new

 

he senses longing and the arch in her eyes

raises laughter like kaleidoscope shards

unlit and dark

light and spacious

touching the wideness of new nuances of layered love

 

he will not let her fall

till she can run & rise above

proud of her independence

the way grit falls through her hands

 

she can still spin men like tops

& hoola hoop hips that sway to the sound

of her Northern Soul

 

he lets her make music

and never complains - much




 

Author notes

I'm not sure, but he makes me feel like a woman again, so meh! - yes

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008
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  • Lucy.
    August 5, 2008

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    she can still spin men like tops
    & hoola hoop hips that sway to the sound
    of her Northern Soul

    I love this stanza. I love the whole thing…and yes, it is clear that this write comes from ‘feeling like a woman’.

    Thanks so much for your entry.


  • Mari Goes
    July 27, 2008
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    You dancing again

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    July 26, 2008
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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 26, 2008
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    You are all woman my dear Gill, this is wonderful.


  • Cherokee
    July 26, 2008
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  • Nicolette gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    This one just makes me smile in capital letters... so happy you're feeling this way, Gilly.

    nothing else needs to be said other than this is fine poetry....and of course, some more smiles..



    ~ Nicolette


  • ArtFullyMe silver member
    July 26, 2008

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    You see I knew you'd do good..
    You have a way of connecting.. always

    and I'm glad you wrote!



    Good luck!


  • apples fell
    July 26, 2008

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    I know this feeling. I think it is wonderful to be there. To walk that trail with all your ducks lined up. You know I think in time this could be a wonderful thing you have. Yes it could. I see some back story here from our various conversations, and that helps. The kaleidoscope stanza is well penned. The language is good, wanting. Soulful piece Gilly.

    ;


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    now this is a fine entry! Good luck in the contest, gil Love, Lane


  • Rowan gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    I can really relate to this, I've always loved that about your work.


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    July 26, 2008

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    I love the way you always say it so straight from you personally and so honestly. Coupled with your great talent, no wonder you reach the hearts!

    Also ... very happy and pleased for you!

    Sol


  • fortyninereasons
    July 26, 2008
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    I see you have fiddled with this. I can hear music! Love Juls


  • Cannonsfire
    July 26, 2008
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  • Suzanne Dia
    July 26, 2008

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    add an e to kaleidescop

    I like this, Gilly.

    It is real.. and well, I do understand


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