I stand with hands on hips on the precipice
With a jaunty tilt to my hat, and song in my heart
That dares the requiem to attempt to play just yet.
There’s no point exploding with the fatal diagnosis.
With a jaunty tilt to my hat, and song in my heart,
I embrace the beauty of time-sensitive joygathering.
There’s no point exploding with the fatal diagnosis -
Okay, Death, tell me what I’m living for!
I embrace the beauty of time-sensitive joygathering;
Seeing the end in the mirror, I’m finally letting myself thrive.
Okay, Death, tell me what I’m living for!
Let me spend myself on passions instead of despair.
Seeing the end in the mirror, I’m finally letting myself thrive,
Grateful that Death was kind enough to
Let me spend myself on passions instead of despair
And avoid exploding with the fatal diagnosis.
Author notes
This is a pantoum. It is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first and third lines of the next.
A contest entry
- FORM POETRY..(BIG POINTS) by vici377.
3250 points, ended July 28, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Nice. Strange form though. Yet wtill an enjoyable read
Thanks for entering.
Congratulations,
Good luck in the contest.
Chin up,
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It's a pantoum.
Gracias
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I've never heard of a pantoum before.
This is amazing,
I really do like it.
Thank you for entering and good luck. ♥
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Outstanding
This is a difficult form to write in and I thought you did really well. This is a strong poem that speaks out. I loved the line ok death tell me what i'm living for as it is so original. A thoughtful poem.
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Thank you for your comment! We did a big section on form poetry in my poetry class, and I had a lot of fun with it.
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BRAVO
Okay, Death, tell me what I’m living for!
PURE GENIUS..absolutely love everything about this write..thanx so much for entering..
remember not to click the stars so this remains anonymous.
blessings..namaste..
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Deeply daunting at one point
As they say "nothing is to be feared only understood"
I enjoyed this read
keep it up
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