The thunder promises
Sweet, safe violence,
Like the last man I had.
The tightening in my chest
Feels like the more dangerous
Breeds of love -
Frenzied impotence,
The lines between
Shock
And awe
And terror
Blurring in wind
Strong enough
To sweep me away,
Just like he promised.
Author notes
49 words, says my handy-dandy Microsoft Word counter.
A contest entry
- Rainstorms And After ( 50 words ) by HopelessScribbles.
775 points, ended July 27, 2008, 14 entries
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Comments
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Neat!
I loved your ideas here, and what you did with your writing. Great style and very very strong. Great job, deffinetly keep up the great work.
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Oh dear. Yes, that's not so simple. Simple in a way but not really. Well worded description of disappointment.
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lol very good
love the message you penned in this, very nice and blunt visions,life needs more promises like you show here, thank you for this entry, good luck
Lin
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