Defense Dilemma - Ian
He walked to the recruitment place
With spirit and with pride;
Prepared his nation’s threat to face
Ambition put aside
They told him of a wily foe
Who planned to harm them all
So he would to the rescue go
And answer nation’s call.
And so they shipped him overseas
With others of like mind,
His country’s rulers he would please
His loved ones leave behind.
And there he met the enemy
Their hatred was intense,
A real threat for all to see
He, freedom’s last defense.
But then he noticed something new,
The ones who suffered most
Were not the people that he knew
Or terrorists who boast.
But people like his friends at home,
Just ordinary folk,
They not the type to rant or foam
For most of them were broke.
And so contestants slugged it out
As soldiers on each side
Made plans the other side to route.
The population cried!
For ’twas their homes that others razed
Their livelihood was small,
These innocents with fear now crazed
Now hated one and all
“© Ian Grice 2008”
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WOW!!!
You really blew me away with this poem, Poet!!!
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i read your poem here and a few others if yours and i typed a comment to say so.
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Most exellent observation on the futility of war and the circle of hate it can create. How would any innocent feel when their homes are destroyed and their families killed?
***Pam***
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Ah, I do love war poems. I agree that this one tells a good story. It reminds me of my very favorite war poem by Thomas Hardy, "The Man He Killed." In part:
Yes; quaint and curious war is!
You shoot a fellow down
You'd treat if met where any bar is,
Or help to half-a-crown.
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Thank you
I really appreciate your quote from Thomas Hardy. That about sums things up doesn't it? The generals plan, and the soldiers reluctantly follow.
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Guess it happens everywhere, huh? The picture you used is quite the masterpiece. I wonder if it's authentic, you never can tell if it's CGI anymore.
I love your storytelling, rhyming is gorgeous, and it read very fast. Clean, and yes, your creative writing professor would be proud
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I love history, and some of the stories we can tell inspire so many things. This reminds me of some western films I love, and some country songs, I love, and in general, just a great story.
Fantastic!
Jin
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