Pass on to the moon towards the lunar light.
Spread solar wings and take flight.
Energy shooting across the sky like rain.
Falling back to Earth to live life again.
Recycled to be something new.
Among oceans of water so blue.
A mass of energy across space and time, hurled.
As the lunar souls journey to the universal world.
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Wow, short, but so well expressed. Such a great write. Thank you for sharing
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I think I will stay on the moon I do not think that I am allergic to anything there. another great write sis.
love your rev bro papa
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Thanks, brother William. Yeah, not much to be allergic to on the moon, eh? Unless there's some sort of special interstellar dust that people don't know about that may be toxic to breathe in, but I think that would be fairly unlikely. Thanks for the comment.
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This poem paints a scientific picture for us. It gives a hint of romance to the formula of universe.
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Thanks, Sis. Glad to see you stop by my page. I missed talking to you.
As always, I thank you for your support in my work.
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Wowzers!!
Another one Yay!!
Wonderful rhyme Beautiful and Love those words: Lunar Light
Feels so good to say
and when I read reference to: recycled-
I kept thinking how one creations serves a purpose to another-
can be recycled and used for something else
Love this!!
Keep that quill dancing~ and let me know when I can borrow Your brain
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Thanks, Desire. Yeah, sometimes my inspiration to write come back. Depends on if I read something to spark my muse or not. I hadn't thought of it that way, that one creation can serve a purpose to another, but that makes a lot of sense. It's like supernovas when the stars explode, the atoms and energy can create new stars later on in the future of the universe. When can you borrow my brain? Well, I'm going to need it by the time autumn comes, but I'll lease it to you for the rest of the summer if you want.
Always appreciate the comments.
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Hi Haley, good write. Very nice imagery and great rhyming. Your love of the universe shines through with this one. Thanks for sharing your visions.
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Hi Charley. Always nice to see you stopping by and commenting.
Hope your weekend is going well.
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Wow.
Great poem. Scientific, yet poetic in its ideas. It flows well and back like the lovely lunar souls that you penned about.
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Thanks.
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the imagery is very beautiful here. You wrote this so perfectly. I especially like the second line: Spread solar wings and take flight.
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Thanks. Yeah, I tried to put in lots of imagery in this piece. Sometimes I like to take a break from the real scientific stuff and just try to describe stuff using imagery.
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oooh this was cool, I loved the rhyme and imagery in this. Awesome write, haven't seen you around here in a while, hope your well!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Thanks, Michaela. Yeah, I know I haven't been on here too often, as far as writing goes anyway. I am reading a bit this summer hoping to get inspiration. It's going to get worse once I start college in the fall. With my classes and homework it will be amazing if I get a chance to write at all, but I'll be sure to post if there is anything I do write. I appreciate you stopping by and commenting. Hope your summer is going well.
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I loved the rhyme in this lil sis.
Very well thought and configured work you've penned here. I loved the ending as well, lunar souls journey to the univeral world. Deep and thought provoking.
Great imagery and thanks for sharing.
ephiphany
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Thanks, Sis. Glad you enjoyed it. You know my style, philosophical and exploring the universe. Appreciate the comment.
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The words really take me there, the cosmos I envision when I read this. The imagery creates a very tranquil insistence that is quite hard to deny. Personally, I believe in the concept of reincarnation; I think it is a beautiful thing, even if it is overwhelming. These are such fantastical words!
Write on,
Smiling
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Yeah, I think the concept of reincarnation is real on some level. Quantum, cosmological, something. Thanks for the comment.
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