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Summer Stalking

Yesterday at noon
I sat alone in the sun
afraid to be seen
At last you sat down nearby
I smiled at you: my prey

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  • azure85 gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    What an ending, it is quite a surprise. It leaves the reader wondering, which is a good way to write. Thank you so much.


  • iamlost gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    I really like how the story progresses in this, how it gives just enough to make you wonder and create your own finale. The last line is the climax, so the end is up to the reader. Wonderfully done, best of luck in the contest!