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Lickin'

Lickin' like crazy,
'cause the day sure is hot!
I saved up my money...
it's this cone I've got.

The flavor's all melty
right down to my tummy.
The more that I eat,
I feel kind of funny.

Chocolate mint cream...
a girl's ice cream dream.

A contest entry

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  • Topnotchsy
    August 5, 2008

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    Nice write. Definitely captured the memory of icecream on a hot summer day. Ice cream on a hot summer day....hmmm....it's hot. Hmmm...it's summer. Forget memories, I think it's been a reminder

  • Judith Chandler
    July 26, 2008

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    This is great. You have captured the joy of a little kid so well and there is surely nothing more joyful than an ice cream cone, paid for with your own money.

    Chocolate mint, an excellent choice.

    Thank you for entering my contest.


  • individuality gold member
    July 26, 2008

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    a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along the ice cream cone of dreams. i could just do with an ice cream right now.


  • Rheea gold member
    July 25, 2008
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    I wanna bite of that I do.. yummy =) wow can taste that.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 25, 2008

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    Yummo Scremaing for icecream I love chocolate mint icecream grabs a spoon yummo Goodluck in the contest best wishes

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