Welcome while you may
each moment of loneliness
that loiters and lingers
at the edge of your dreams
like acid pools that pause before
burning their brazen attitudes
into your soul.
Gasp if you must such tempers
that dare to hiss and spit
and adopt their brief embrace
as thy companion, confirming
in your belief their presence
as one would note that all
light fades to dark and
then back to light.
In your solitude remember
that you are more than alone
in your seclusion, you are separate
alone, isolated and remote and yet
in that briefness a chance
an opportunity to begin again
to turn away from yourself
and embark from wherever you chose.
Take that step of purpose
with intent and conscious
knowing and welcome the unknown.
Do not hurry or rush with caution
but ride measured thoughts
and freedom will be yours,
one way or another.
TC
A contest entry
- Writes for My AP Daughter... by mysticstorm.
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We are to embrace and welcome the unknown and the known...the wisdom you acknowledge in this remarkable write.
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Incredible wise advice with in this wonderfully penned piece. So much thoughtfulness with in these lines. Amazing Piece
" Do not hurry or rush with caution
but ride measured thoughts
and freedom will be yours,"
Flawless
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Thank you Patty
Thank you so much but on reading it again I can see a few changes I would make such as using alone twice in the same stanza. Don't know why I didn't see that.
Gratitude to you and yours.
TC -
Basically it says
Let go of what holds you back and if you dare you may taste the forbidden fruit without being burned in hell?, but who knows for cure. If you don't buy the ticket you don't win the prize and that's for sure.
See you
TC
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Nice
This is really nice work here it has a very good message, and you create strong images in one's mind while reading this aloud(at least for me).
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Many thanks
I really want to thank you for reading this and most of all for giving me your opinion, I'm flattered. I am also very grateful that writers such as you who love to express themselves are kind enough to lend their support to such as I.
Many many thanks. I certainly want to find your work and take some time to read it.
Regards
Terry
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Strong point and meaning...often we do not really know what we want or need when we rush...yet they do and are far past this...thank you for sharing!
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Blaaaaaaaaaaaa
I wish I had taken a bit more time to really read this through but I didn't and now I see such glaring errors, I wish I could erase it.
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