Hello there
to you underneath the thick ice.
Now, pardon me, sir,
but I don't find it pleasant for you stare as you do.
Also you're being quite rude;
not introducing yourself as you do.
Oh look at that!
Such a breath of desperation,
such a look of despair!
What a specimen you are...
What a specimen of artistic expression.
Oh yes!
Do continue to scratch at the surface of ice,
do continue! Come, come now! Harder with your bleeding nails!
Oh, such a pity...
I must go now, the others await me...
A contest entry
- Macabre Medicines! by Lost Vampyre Angel.
1200 points, ended August 24, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Want to be READ? ENTER HERE! by Avatar of Innocence.
525 points, ended September 7, 2008, 130 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I loved this. You did a great job from start to finish, but my favorite line was "What a specimen of artistic expression." Wow.
Write on.
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Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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I must say this is disturbing in a sense to read and i am positive it was disturbing to write. Full of disturbing pleasantries to one who is dying in such a painful manner. But if has a strange dark charm to it.
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Oh I assure you it wasn't disturbing to write! Quite the opposite, actually!
It pleases me it was of your enjoyment...
Thank you very much for taking time to read, yet alone comment, on this poem of mine.
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fucking brilliant mind my french
ooh me likes this, it made me laugh *bashes sick mind with a stick* this is really good, though its so little words and lines its just so effective the way its written, really this is really great stuff here ^_^
keep penning, best of luck in the contest,
kitty xxx
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Glad you liked it and also thank you for commenting!
I thank you for two reasons; 1. I appreciate it greatly, obviously.
2. The last contest I was in I didn't get a comment... Which makes one feel it's a waste of time...
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how dare they? thats just rude, i always comment my entries in my contests, no matter how long or short, good or bad i comment, even if not straight away i do always comment, your very welcome dear
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My thoughts exactly!
Rude, just plain rude... However it would seem you, most certianately, are not of such a type. Which is pleasing.
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isnt it like 4:15am there? lol No i always comment my contest entries tis only polite to do so
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Haha!
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nor do i, but i have to i have work at 8 ugh nice eh? but ill be awake till 30 mins past then ill be going to bed, well thats the plan donyt know if it will go through with or not though
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Aww poor you...
Well at least it is a fact that no sleep is better than little sleep... In my case anyway...
I get that sick feeling if I only get 30 min. or some, sleep.
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