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A fathers love.

She came to me, this dark sad day. Wanting to go, but I'm ordered to stay. Locked behind these cold metal bars, I long for the day to count the stars. For I can no longer walk these lands. For ending and taking anouther life by my own two hands. From his body the blood did spill. From laps of judgement I proceeded to kill. For these crime will haunt me so. To the land of death and shadow, I shall surely go...

For this my seventh year, his eye I see in my nightmares, unforgiveness the thing I fear.Living alone inside my cell. I pray to the lord God to save me from the firey pits of hell.I remember The day I took the life of another, being only eighteen, I saw the rage in the eyes of his mother. They say murder is an unforgiveable sin. If I could go back in time, yes, I would do it again...

For the courts allowed him to go, no punishment for abusing my only child. After judgement I grew wild. Vengence had completly overtaken me. Blood was the only thing I could see. Each and every night while I lied in bed, to kill that man was the only thing in my head. I was ordered by the courts not to talk to him and stay away. I go to visit my son's grave, my blood boils hotter each and every day. I desided to go to the pawn and buy myself a hand gun...

Now these uniformed men have handcuffed me and are leading me down a dark hall. Each foot step as loud as a thunderclap at each fall. The priest that walks beside me, is telling me to ask forgiveness and the lord God shall set me free.For now I'm strapped to this stainless steel table. Placing a needle in my arm, moving I am unable. Then I hear a whisper from above, my child I have forgiven you. For you have recieved a fathers love.

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  • ItsUrHomeboy
    August 19, 2008
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    Powerful Words

    Man this has a powerful feeling... Nice work, I just cant come up with stuff like that.. Write on


  • LivinitupCutie
    July 26, 2008

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    This is indeed a very different view..a perspective from a killer..a feeling of hatred towards another and seeking vengance for your lost..I truly felt the pain and the mix feeling..the imagry was so real it's scary..thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!

    Keep penning!!!
    Lieu


  • ShadowWeaver
    July 26, 2008

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    good

    i liked it... its from the view of a criminal but it tells why he did it. i would probably do the same thing actually but i would never let it get that far. anyways i like this alot, keep writing.


  • queen Moderators member
    July 25, 2008

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    Welcome to all poetry

    This is amazing, you have such great detail through out i feel like i was there Well done
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