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Stolen Tears

Common ground is hard

to find along turning points

that connect souls

 

it pulses and rises to the

surface

cold dampness underneath

dark waters

 

the difference

falls into dirty baskets

of panting frenzies

a well known rhythm of clicking hips

- a natural free state of being

 

remnants of flesh

washed and hung to dry

nestled into secrets of consent

 

stitched second thoughts

into manufactured threads of

disillusions

 

complications of life revolve

like rotating doors at Macy’s

twisting like vines around ankles

 

merely a sketch of tomorrow eyes,

bitter lies unraveling like twine

intensified tension as fingers speak fire

- anything but simple

 

wrapped around each other

like pit vipers needing warmth

caught up in ancient movements

- life rushed

                        - hushed

 

now smudges lay unsettled

like dark secrets

- beautifully dark ones

behind a two way mirror

- distorted blue on black

 

choking on the substance of what

is left behind

 

scorched skin surrounding silence

scattered among stains that will never be clean

 

- and the wind rolls

            stealing tears

 

 

7/25/08 

Author notes

Prompt: Laundry day

Credit for quote: Adisage
"i am simple
and fall
like laundry
old and burdened
under
weeks of wrinkled
affairs."

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  • Exo
    August 7, 2008

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    Yeah, this poem rolled right off the tip of my tongue like a bitter taste. In a good way...that is. Normally, longer poems start to bore me, but you had imagery that would not stop coming, metaphors that linked into chains, and you had great grammar. I wish you the best of luck in the 'laundry day' contest.


  • The Unknown Poet1
    July 30, 2008

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    this does slide sensually off the lips. Great metaphoric images within the engraved sensualness. The reader can inturpt this a couple different ways and something only talented writer can accomplish. I enjoyed the read alot, the grand use of poetic device, and good luck in the contest!

  • VeritasLiberte
    July 25, 2008

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    Talk about "hanging your dirty laundry out for all to see"!!! Another great write Becky! Great metaphores here, relating laundry to life! Way to go! Hope you get the Gold!


  • adsaige
    July 25, 2008

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    Judged

    Oh, this is fantablous! I mean...er...first off, I would like to point out you had some really fantastic stanzas here! Some strong key points and imagery. Very well written write that has been formatted well, and is a feast for both the tongue and soul!

    Thank you for entering.
    Good Luck!