Observing heaven's darkened glance
I ponder pains of passing year
Present the solar spirit's dance
Mind distraught with worldly fears
Of funds and family
Life and Love
Influence from those above
Ceaseless thoughts in serene silence
A hectic soul in search of guidence
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Author notes
My life has been pretty busy lately, not much time or focus to write like I used to. Had this idea watching the stars on the way home from work a couple days ago, figured I'd update.
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Very Nice!
Even though I have a tendency to get carried away and end up with really long pieces, I have an affinity for short poetry. Lots said in very few lines. The imagery here is truly wonderful. The rhyme and the flow are wonderful. This piece is a true delight in an otherwise average day. Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece with everyone here at AP, and allowing me the chance to stumble upon it, read and enjoy it.
Live your life, it may be hard at times, but remember - Without the bad things we wouldn't recognize the good in life. It would all be good, we wouldn't need an outlet. Exceptional.
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"Ceaseless thoughts in serene silence
A hectic soul in search of guidence"
Eh My favorite lines in this one.
*Sits down in usual indian style cross and sips Dr.Pepper from straw because it tastes better and lasts longer that way.*
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hey bub...i like this one. (guidance) love you.
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feels like a yearning for peace in a stressful surrounding
calming down
an awe of the world around
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I suppose that "heaven's darkened glance" would be the sky at night. I honestly don't think that the "solar spirit" has a dance. "Mind distraught with worldly fears" is purely the essece of a mad poetic genius, I love it! You gripped my mind and held it captive by this short serenade to the mystics of night-time serenity. I loved it!
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nice....I like...good....
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in a way very calming ...glad you had time to let your mind wander ..very nice!! thanks
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Short but you made a point :]
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