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One's Love to Another

Your touch is all I want to feel
Your face is all I want to see

I know your heart is mine
I know that what you say is true

Your love keeps me sane
Your words keep me going

My love for you grows stronger
My life gets better every day

Having you by my side is my strength
Having you in my life makes it better

Even with all this down and said
There is still so much more to you

And no matter what I say, good or bad
It can never amount to who you really are

Be honest and tell me what you think.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Jade Allgood
    August 27, 2008

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    This is wonderful, you have captured so many of my feelings here. I rarely enjoy poems that don't rhyme but when they are honest and describe emotions so well, they are a pleasure to read.


  • sgking123 silver member
    August 2, 2008

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    excellent

    Having you by my side is my strength
    Having you in my life makes it better

    Even with all this down and said
    There is still so much more to you

    And no matter what I say, good or bad
    It can never amount to who you really are

    well done this is beautiful.You abide by a person so much.Love and faith keeps you going.Thanks for sharing .please visit some of my poetry.


  • Underground Vixen
    July 30, 2008

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    Hey you

    Hey. I actually really like this peice. I also happen to approve of the repetition. I think it makes your point more solid and real. Good work girly. I'll read more later. ^_^

  • aaaaaaaa
    July 25, 2008
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    You start off each line with the same word of the previous line. "your... your" "I... I" "My... my" etc etc.

    This in my opinion really makes the poem bad. you have some nice thoughts in this and if you fix that part then I think this can be good. thanks for sharing.